This ode is a thoughtful, emotional tribute to a fellow rider, and I really love the last stanza. The poem is great from start to finish, and at first I thought it was free verse, until I read back through it. The rhyme is just enough to satisfy the reader, and subtle enough not to distract from the beautiful message. Nice balance. Well done. Warmest regards,
Thanks mate. I really love nature, too, and am lucky enough to live in such a beautiful place. We don't have the ocean, but we have majestic mountains, gorgeous rivers, and breathtaking scenic surrounds. Nearing 50, I much prefer rural living to life in a city these days. Thanks for your warm comments on my poetry - much appreciated. Wishing you all the best, my friend. Kind regards, Chris
I can feel the breeze and hear Taps being played, as I read this wonderful ode to the men who have died for our freedom. This is a masterful poem, my friend, and one can't help but be moved by the emotions that you write of in the last stanzas. A great piece. Well done. Best wishes, mate. Chris
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Hi Chuck! I've written romantic poetry before of course, but this one wasn't about Mandy. LOL. This was about my first serious girl friend. We are friends on Facebook, and she recently broke up with her cheating partner. I felt sorry for her, and of course, one always keeps a flame in their heart for their first love. That's where this came from. Heh. Love=life=love. Regards, Chris :-)
Thanks Chuck - I've taken some time off since March, and have had the time to look around and reflect on the world, and to think about my life and my faith. Perspective requires breathing space, patience and time. I'm glad that this is beginning to show in my poetry - I thank you for your kind response. Best wishes, Chris
You have said it well, Chuck. The picture brings so many thoughts to my mind and you have described many of them. I really liked the stanza that said "Circling above the ocean spray among dark clouds on a half flag day. The eagle cries and calls in dismay. Another Hero dies today". Thanks for your words. Don
Thanks very much, Chuck. Mate, you've written many wonderful poems, and I certainly can't write about war/soldiers/honor the way you do. I'm grateful for your feedback, my friend. Have a great weekend, take care, and best wishes. Kind regards, Chris
Well done Chuck I apologize for not visiting and commenting on your poetry. Next time you're on the site give me a heads up I'd like to speak with you about the group Cowboys and Cowgirls.
If all those who believes war is a waste then our world would be run by thugs and tyrants .No freedom would be found no joy for in order to keep this country safe drom such evil our soldiers stand on the edge of hell every day to stop the violence from entering our country . Those who are evil cares not what age they kill they care not if they are innocent or guilty all they want is control . I agree this country has soldiers everywhere in the world and I feel they should be brought home to protect us right here from the tyrants . For the gangs in this country have gotten so bad its almost as bad here as it is afar . Destruction is taking over without anyone to stop it so how long will it be before what is happening there becomes our everyday life where the skies are filled with dust and debrie and the building are shattered in all directions who will stop the violence if it werent for our soldiers and the people who stand by them
Reading this makes the heart weak . For so many have died this way alone and so afraid. Many everyday alone, die so alone and the wish of a friend here on earth. Yet their friend waits for them on the other side...mac
That's an awesome poem, mate. It sounds like you've been reminiscing some. I really like the simplistic structure of this poem, and the consistent rhyme form, which combined with the content in this case gives the piece a sombre and piercing tone. It's masterfully done. Warmest regards,
Amen my friend amen indeed and as I was told by my father as a child so is it in civilian life as well there is no hjob to small for it takes us all to make this world function as a whole . I pray for all who enter the military of their choice for their bravery and knowledge to help this country stay safe and fee . Bravo to this write
A very moving poem Chuck , the language you used was a nice homey touch. Good days brother and happy trails.
Outstanding my Friend! Have been to over 300 missions over the past 6 years, this is the Best and Patriotic Organization I've ever had the privilege to belong to!! All the best my Friend,
Hey Brother Chuck,
Such a fine and honorable poem, Chuck - very moving. I pray that in time, even the dissenters can understand just what sacrifices soldiers have made in dying for their country, and what courage it takes to fight for freedom, including that of the people who do not understand war. So many people owe their lives and freedoms to these soldiers. It's great that you participate in the PGR mission, and I am impressed by the poem you have written about it. Warmest regards,
That is a very emotional piece. I'm proud of you for doing such a brave thing. Really, that's something! My neighbour was reading over my shoulder and he cried, but in a good way! Well done!
oh yes, thank you for reading
Thanks Chuck - much appreciated. Warmest regards,
Great poem, Chuck. It's probably the most erotic one that you've written, or at least that I have read. Only one thing stuck out (to me) as grammatically questionable, and that's the third line in your first par. Should that read, "You're mindless..." (instead of 'your')? A very enjoyable read, my friend. It sounds as though you're loving life. Wonderful. Take care and best wishes.
Hi Chuck, it was a little diddy mildly pokeing fun at a few on here and sticking up for another, the poke'es took offence. I'd do it again if given the chance, it brought me great pleasure.
Very good write! You get a sense of fun here rather than blatant exposure. Sunday
I saw this in the suggestion box~so I thought why not; I got the impression that he's proud to be able to please his partner.
The only thing I didn't really understand was the "fumbled" part but I bet I can find the definition/meaning later.
Oh man, that's awesome. I really love the brevity of the lines coupled with the depth of emotion shining through. Awesome effort, Chuck. You can be very versatile with your style of poetry, something I try to do but rarely succeed. Well done. Warmest regards,